[Week 12] Plan for 2nd Draft

1. My Self Evaluation

According to my first draft and self evaluation post, I thought that I should make more creative attention gradder for my readers, remove repeated part in my essay to make my essay clearer and more logical. Also, I need to my alternative about my topic - neobehaviorism.


2. Sam Teacher's Feedback

He pointed the grammatical mistakes and misused sentences as the biggest problem of my first essay. So, I wil focus on modifying them using software's help and korean teacher's help.


3. Clarify Outline

1) introduction : attention grabber : John Locke's saying
                           explain my topic   : Explain a limitation of empirical discovery with positivism
                                                              (Suggest a behaviorism as one kind of behaviorism!)
                           declare my thesis  : BEHAVIORISM CANNOT EXPLAIN ALL THINGS!

2) narration     : Definition of science
                          The Legitimacy of scientific research method in psychology
                          Behaviorists' arrgance (ex. Richard Dawkins)
                          Some brilliant psychologists' refutation and new way to research